more and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot

More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged.

More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged.
As days passed by we become more advanced in terms of science and technology.
Possible spelling mistake found.Even though
Eventhough
we lead a modern lifestyle when it
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comes
about our health we go back and
The verb 'to depend' requires the preposition '(up)on': "depends on".depends on
depends
traditional medicines. My experience proves my notion right.

What
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makes
a
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man
's life more successful, if not his health? Nowadays
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many
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people
are getting suffer from
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different
health issues by the influence of modern lifestyles and it becomes incurable by the
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use
of modern medicine. COVID-19 is the best example for this situation which we are experiencing right
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now
.
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Eventhough
we
A determiner is probably missing here: "have the best".have the best
have best
scientists and research groups in our country, it becomes
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hard
to introduce a better
as well
as effective solution to control and
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stop
this pandemic situation.
On the other hand
there have
been made
tremendous
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changes
in terms of development by modern facilities and lifestyles.

However
,
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many
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people
believe that there will be an answer for every health problem when we follow traditional medical system. The main drawback of modern medicines are the side effects which we lack in traditional medicines. They are
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very
cheaper than modern medicine in which everyone can afford.
As a result
, every individual
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get
proper treatment and can be
Consider using a past participle here: "staid", "stayed".staidstayed
stay
healthy.

To conclude
, the usage of traditional medicines in place of modern medicine
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helps
to
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improve
our health conditions.
5.5
Total Band
5.5
Coherence and Cohesion
5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
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